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Dear Young,
I hope everything is alright now. Bankers seem to be busy so you must take good care of your health so that you won't get sick . Always remember that prevention is better than cure.
The highlighted sentences are the correct ones. Please find time to study them. *^^*
I had a fever last night,so I'm very tired. Therefore, I am doing homework now.
>>>I was very tired and had fever last night that's why it's only that I do my homework.
There are 4 major banks in korea now. They are competing fiercely to survive.The rest banks also are doing their best to look for nitch market.
>>>There are major banks in Korea now. ( note: capitalize proper nouns like Korea, Young, Seoul) The rest of the banks are also doing their best to look for their niche in the market.
The main earning sources of bank in past were corporate loan.
>>>Previously, the main source of earnings of banks were corporate loans.
However,the sources were diversified into consumer loan,mortgage loan,fund sales fees, etc thesedays.
>>>However, nowadays, the sources have been diversified into consumer loan, mortgage loan, fund sales, etc.
For these reasons, bankers have to do various works and confroting much stress situations.
>>>For these reasons, bankers have to do various works in confronting much stressful situations. (note: stress- noun ; stressful - adjective which describes the situation)
Thanks too!
Teacher Emely |
