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   ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ   mdj0316    µî·ÏÀÏ   2013-07-16
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I'd like to talk about a korean person.
>>> I'd like to talk about a Korean person.
     *Korean is a proper noun so you have to start it with a capital letter, so as with American, Russian and so on…

His name is Chan Sung Jung and he is a fighter of UFC which is the most biggest fight club in all of those clubs.
>>> His name is Chan Sung Jung and he is a fighter in UFC which is the biggest (largest) fighting club among all clubs.

In the club, his nick name is a Korean Zombie because he has a strong endurance.

For the reason, he got the chance to fight against with the champion a few days ago.

The champ's name is Jose Aldo. He is so strong guy in his weight, feather weight.

Most of the gamblers anticipate that the champ will defeat the contender, but I believe the expectation will also be wrong.

The reason why I said, "Also" is because he is always
an underdog in the anticipation before the fight, but he always wins the games.

He will also make the miracle in this fight too.

Thus, The first champ as an asian will appear.
>>> Thus, there will be a First Asian Champion.
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