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Snow has two different sides.
> OK
Looking the scene of the snow falling through a window at home is beautiful.
> Looking at the scene of the snow falling through a window at home is beautiful.
> Except for a minor correction, this sentence is actually really good. It makes me imagine the scene.
The pure white snowy natural landscape is also indeed fantastic.
> OK
Especially, a snowy mountain really looks like that at the fantasyland.
> Or,...... More especially, the snow-capped mountain really looks like that of a fantasyland.
Children also like snow very much.
> OK
Snowball fight, making a snowman, ski and etc are very good winter play for them.
> Snowball fight, snowman making, ski, etc, are very good winter games for them.
However, snow is very dangerous.
> OK
Heavy snow causes traffic jams and damage asphalt roads.
> Heavy snow causes traffic jams and damage on asphalt roads.
> Heavy snow causes traffic jams and damages asphalt roads.
When snow lay thick on the road, cars can’t drive fast.
> When snow lays thick on the road, cars can't run fast.
Furthermore, it will freeze and become icy road.
> OK
Then, it would become very slippery, so driving on the icy road is very dangerous.
> OK
Sometimes, the weight of heavy snow destroys some of weak houses or structures.
> OK
Too much is always as bad as too little ------- Oh, this one right here is really very good. I like this sentence as well as the message that it carries. Good job! |
