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Hello Si-yun,
Thank you for practicing on your writing. It was nice to hear about your Saturday activities:)
Here are some corrections:
Last Saturday, I met with friends whom I had met when I was a soldier.
> Last Saturday, I met friends whom I have met when I was a soldier.
That time I worked at military camp for one year, and at military hospital for one year.
> That time I worked in military camp for one year and at the military hospital for another year.
Because I got a skin disease during military training. I recovered from disease. I’d have liked to come back to camp. ]
>:)
But the hospital needed much manpower because of openings of nurse.
> But the hospital needed a lot of manpower because of an opening for nurses.
So I worked as a plastic surgery nurse at hospital for year.
>:))
The friends I met last Saturday are that I had met at hospital when I worked a nurse.
> The friends I met last Saturday are those that I had met in the hospital when I worked as a nurse.
We talked about what they did. We drunk much. I had interesting time with them.
> I'm glad you had fun. It is always nice to meet old friends. I did the same thing with my college buddies last Sunday:)
See you tomorrow.
Teacher NEa:) |
