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Si-yun,
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6.I prefer to buy a laptop computer.
>:)
Nevertheless a laptop computer is more expensive than desktop,
I need to use it in my way to work.
> Nevertheless, a laptop computer is more expensive than a desktop computer. I also need to use it on my way to work.
I go to work by a subway and a bus. It takes about 2 hours . I have too much time in my way.
> I go to work via the subway, then a bus, it takes about 2 hours. I have too much spare time on the way.
So it’s more useful for me.
>:)
9.Ok well there are three meetings about children’s health matters.
> Okay, there are three meetings about children's health concerns.
the first is held on august 17 at lakewood hall.
> The first is held on August 17 at the Lakewood Hall.
Eugene harper from east medical school is going to give a speech about childhood obesity.
>Eugene Harper from East Medical School is going to give a speech about childhood obesity.
The second one is on october 10 at lakewood hall.
> The second one is on October 10 at Lakewood Hall.
Eugene harper also is going to give a speech about childhood eating disorder treatment.
> eugene Harper is also going to give a speech about childhood eating disorder treatments.
The last one is on december 12 at shoreline hall.
> The last one is on December 12 at the Shorline Hall.
Donald laton from downing medical school is going to give a speech about children’s diabetes treatment.
> Donald Laton from Downing Medical School is going to give a speech about children's diabetes treatments.
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